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[Ape2020]

Well the last one was well over 300 replies so I thought it was time to start again.  Just so we never forget, hehe here is a link to to past.  YAHCT (yet another homebrew character thread)

I'll post again with my first submission very soon, but like the last thread everyone is welcome to join in with a submission of their own.  Or chip in any comments, questions, answers, suggestions or giggles. 

-ape2020

[Ape2020]

Now to start off I throwing in one of the three I was still working on during my Christmas break outburst.  It kind of funny that this guy would be first up since I didn't really have any idea where to go with him for the longest time.

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The Shinobi entered the lab complex as silently as cats.  Moving among the shadows they were summoned when an intruder was detected by automated security.  

Their leader sent each of the other two to investigate left and right hallways as he chose to monitor anyone trying to escape.  Like phantoms they all disappeared into thin air.  

All thro' the complex, not a creature was stirring, not even the lab mice.  The experiments were hung by the bio-tanks with care, in hopes that sentiment soon would be there.  The children were nestled all snug in their cells, while nightmare visions of red death danc'd in their heads.  

Nothing could be found every corner was searched as the Shinobi ceased their systematic search.  So off they went into the dark of the night, in hunt of their prey on that cool moonless night.

As they went a unborn Raziel stirred, opening his eyes for the first time.  Reaching out with its inhuman form, grabbing hold of fresh meat of the shinobi hanging right there.

Locerot Greim
Wissenschaft
Neutral
Prowler
50 levels
(Small Base - 30mm)

Quote “A spy, like a writer, lives outside the mainstream population. He steals his experience through bribes and reconstructs it.”

Attack: 6
Damage: 1
Defense: 9
Armor: 0
Life Points: 13
Resistance: 9
Movement: 6/10
AP Recovery: 3/4

Innate Abilities: Advance Deployment, Infiltration.

Equipment: Locerot may have 2 Advantage cards assigned to him.
Art of Distraction: Locerot doesn’t have to pay Upkeep for Stealth or Deep Cover if there is a friendly unit that is not Hidden within his Control Zone.

OO Stealth (Subterfuge, Effect)
Locerot becomes Hidden.  Upkeep: O

OO Deep Cover (Subterfuge, Effect)
When Locerot activates this skill he chooses any Organizational Agent or Shinobi unit type & gains all their Special Skills (actions that require AP).  He can also take up to 15 levels of options from their Skill Card as long as none of them affect his AP or LP in any way.  Locerot gains any Type or Faction his option or unit choices give him.  Locerot keeps his own original Type, original Faction, Innate Abilities & Special Skills while this skill is active.  This skill can only be activated after Lecerot has been deployed.  Upkeep: O

<Advantage Card>
Decoy
Type: Equipment  Category: Prowler
Actions: Automatic      Level: +5
You may reveal this card after any Enemy unit rolls a successful Seek Check that would reveal this unit or an Infiltration Marker while this unit is using Infiltration, the Seek Check automatic becomes a failure instead.  Retire this card after use.

Name:  Locerot Greim (Number IX)
Rank: Wissenschaft Crow
Place of birth: Eustage, Ilmora
Age: 30
Combat style: Improvisation
Ethic Background: Asher
Raza: Human
Height: 1.99 m
Weight:  83kg
Pasttimes: Debating
Likes: Courtesans & Prostitutes
Dislikes: Children
   
Fluff: Suave, debonair & charming, Locerot is a worldly man that is equally at home in the courts of nobles as of the brothels of slum districts.  He is also one of Wissenschaft’s most prominent Crows.  His ability to infiltrate any organization or gather any information is highly regarded by those in Wissenschaft that even know if his connection to them.  Even if the situation become dire Locerot is calm & in control with an phenomenal ability to improvise a solution.  He is even a threat on the battlefield as his opponents never know what tricks or traps he will spring next.

Notes: Well originally I had no idea what to do with this guy.  He is mentioned in the Gaia book as being a top Crow for Wiss (Shadow 8 lvl) & presently trying to steal a copy of the Necronomicon from the doomed city Terrasanta.  At first I thought of making him a variant of Veronica but I ran into two problems, one I already did that with Sissy Locke and two I couldn’t find a useful role for him to fill.  Then it hit me!  He is a spy so why not make him a take a cover of non-unique Agents & Shinobi.   After crafting Deep Cover to avoid any shenanigans you find with Djinn’s Ash Slave & Absolute Change skills, I looked at how powerful that skill alone was and nerfed some of his other areas.  This included dropping Open Movement, nerfing speed, & dropping his own unique attack.  Still he can fill so many roles in a Wiss party from healer, buffer, debuffer, tank, glass cannon, assassin just from all the options and special skills he is mimicking from the Org Agents or Shinobi.  This is why he is 50 levels due to the potential he holds to be super copy.  Of note I see any skill or ability he gains is not an exactly the same as he uses gadgets, potions, slight of hand & trickery to achieve the same effect, that’s why all his gained powers become Subterfuge in nature.

As always any questions, comments or suggestions please feel free to post them.  I love to fiddle with things.

-ape2020

[Hiro]

What page is Locerot Greim mentioned in Gaia? I missed reading about him somehow.

[Ape2020]

What page is Locerot Greim mentioned in Gaia? I missed reading about him somehow.

You know you could have just looked it up in the glossary as he is listed by name there too. 

But since you asked nicely pg 144 near the last parts of the "The End Of Terrasanta" section.  It gives his class and rank and a little spill of how he is very prominent in Wiss.  The number was just some little fluff I added and likely not even associated with him.

-ape2020

[Hiro]

You know, it never accorded to me that his name would be in the index. LOL *slaps forehead*

[Ape2020]

You know, it never accorded to me that his name would be in the index. LOL *slaps forehead*

Yeah I do it all the time as well.  Its the simplest of things many times that get in life. 

Anyhoo what do you think.  I'm still second guessing myself as to how much is he really worth level wise.  But the builds I run with his rules really are good, all of them even the lowly Azur Agent.

-ape2020

[Ape2020]

Boy its been rather dead in these homebrew thread of late.  Still I will forge on with one of the last two units I basically had done during the new year.  Just one more to go after this if I can stay motivated to nail down the fluff.      
  
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Lin Pao & Jiang Pao watched mesmerized by Princess Ziyi Zhang’s Butterfly Dance.  Even stoic Li Long adored her graceful moments & poetic interpretation of the music.  All failing to see the performances inclusion of the Ki techniques they had earlier exhibit before their dearest friend.  

Soon another student interrupted the proceedings with news that the Demon Squad is attacking the village.  Bidding the Princess a heartfelt goodbye The Three Dragons sprung into action!

“Princess, we must be on our way as well.  Your guards are awaiting you out front.”

“Chi Chi everything is ready I presume.  My beloved heroes will be confronting a great evil, all for the cause of truth, justice, & love!”

“Yes Princess, but with your deepest wishes they will prevail & bring peace once again.”  Chi Chi spoke as she gathered her mistress’s large cloak that glinted of the blades within.

Upon leaving the house the two guards bowed while opening the door.  “Princess Ziyi, what of your handmaiden Chi Chi?”

“She is to stay behind to report word of the outcome of the conflict.”  Princess softly spoke as she entered the Litter.

Up upon the rooftop stood a figure in white & golden silk dress.  “Yes I will be sending my deepest wishes…”  Princess Ziyi smiled as she lowered her pearl mask.

Dié Xing
Wanderer
Light
Warrior
35 levels
(Small Base - 30mm)

Quote “No matter if it is a white cat or a black cat; as long as it can catch mice, it is a good cat.”

Attack: 5
Damage: 1
Defense: 9
Armor: 0
Life Points: 9
Resistance: 11
Movement: 12/16
AP Recovery: 3/5

Butterfly Dance: Dié Xing recovers an Action Point on a dice roll result of 9+ from any type of Offensive or Defensive Action roll.
Beautiful Ally: Li Long, Jiang Pao, or Lin Pao recovers an Action Point on a dice roll result of 8+ from a Ki type of Offensive or Defensive Action roll while in LoS of a friendly Dié Xing.  Dié Xing may replace for any member The Three Dragons for the combine special attacks Heaven and Earth or Double Dragon.  

OO The White Crane (Ki, Dodge)
Roll two dice for this Dodge.  If successful reduce the cost of Dié Xing next Defensive Action in the turn by OAP, this can reduce the cost to zero.

OOO Blade Ballet (Ki, Attack)
+1 Attack / +3 Damage; Dié Xing may reposition herself anywhere around the base of any Enemy unit she is engaged with after this attack.  This does not count as a Movement Action & is not affected by other units or objects in her path.


<Advantage Card>
Dual Weapons
Type: Equipment  Category: Warrior, Prowler
Actions: Automatic      Level: +10
This character may gains a Free Basic Attack or Ranged Attack (character must be have Innate Ranged Attack) immediately after a successful attack.  This includes Ranged Attacks, Counter-Attack, Charges, Basic or Special.  This Free Attack is not part of a Chain of Attacks & can target any Enemy unit in ranged.  Only one free offensive action can be gained per turn with this Equipment.

Name:  Dié Xing (Princess Ziyi Zhang)
Rank: Masked Hero (Shivat Princess)
Place of birth: Peng Wang, Shivat
Age: 18
Combat style: Wushu & Shivat Duo Sword Fighting
Raza: Human
Height: 1.70 m
Weight:  49 kg
Pasttimes: Dancing
Likes: The Three Dragons
Dislikes: Tyrants & Injustice

Fluff:  Dié Xing whose beauty shines through even her pearl mask, is a hero of the meek & defender of truth, justice, & love against all who would seek to destroy it.  Wielding twin jians, Dié Xing has shown up countless times to aid those in need & ally with the Three Dragons when the odds are most dire.  And while she is beloved by all she has helped, none save her faithful handmaiden know her true identity, that of the coy & innocent Princess Ziyi Zhang.  

Note:  This was one of the last units I thought up over Xmas break & was inspired by this Studio McVey figure Azumi.  Yeah I know she is more Lennet then Shivat in look but it was basically what I wanted.  I was always unimpressed with The Three Dragons even when Li Long finally came out and I had such high hopes for them.  So I geared Dié Xing (trying to mean Butterfly Star) to be useful both by herself and as a cheap warrior and in combo with any or all of the 3D.  Yet I needed her to be cheap so I tried to balance her in line with Lin Pao.  Not as defensive as Lin but can really shoot up wither her special dodge.  Her attack is meant to be a middle ground between Lin and Jiang while allowing her to move out of the way for other to charge in.  But most of all I was hoping she would be boost the values of all the other 3D with the AP recovery mechanic.  The fluff thinking behind this is Lin, Jiang, and even Li Long are all to some degree in love with Dié Xing and/or Princes Ziyi.  This has lead them to try to prefect all the motions of their martial arts in an effort to impress her.  Of course Dié Xing feels the same way and so not only do these characters have a lot of potential AP but possible can do even more by recovering AP by rolling high for their actions.  Oh and Butterfly Dance and Honorable Presence were both written to allow rolls that were adjusted up with say Bells of Luck instead of needing straight up rolls of 8, 9, or 10.

Like always I love to take any questions, comments, or suggestions on Dié Xing or any of my other stuff.  Enjoy!

-ape2020

[Ape2020]

Finally my last of the holiday characters.  It is Church and while I don't expect much around here I still hope you all like.

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Ignacio’s feet dug in a pair of trenches several feet long from the impact of the blow.  A blow that would have vanquished a lesser warrior, but Ignacio de La Roca, the Lord of the Knights of Argo was far from ordinary.

“Hahahaha!  So the Senorita is much more then some Empire doll swinging a big hammer.”  Lowering his shield the excitement of this exceptional challenger was obvious.  “Its been a long time since I’ve had to call upon my Lord to vanish an challenger.  And such a young lamb such as yourself…”

“Whatever!  Just bring your tired old butte over here so I can kick in & get this fight over!”  Erika shouted.

“Yes we should end this.”  The great knight spoke as he kneed down in prayer.

“Angel of God,
my guardian dear,
To whom His love
commits me here;
Ever this day
be at my side,
To light and guard,
to rule and guide.
Amen”

Erika could sense something changing.  Her opponent seem to become so vivid & calm.   Still this looked like the perfect opportunely to finish this contest.  

“Better start praying for I’m going to knock silly.”  Erika taunted as she winded up  for another massive blow.

The earth shook as the strike was perfect, even better then the one that knocked the Argo warrior just before.  Yet when the dust cleared he barely moved an inch!

“Now know the power of my Lord…”  Ignacio moved in with god-like speed & power.

Ignacio
Church
Light
Warrior
55 levels
(Medium Base - 40mm)

Quote “A man of courage is also full of faith.”

Attack: 5
Damage: 5
Defense: 8
Armor: 3
Life Points: 17
Resistance: 9
Movement: 8/12
AP Recovery: 3/4

Athleta Christi: As long as Ignacio has both Protection & Shield, he is immune to negative effects of Ki or Magic actions, this does not include damage for a successful attack.

OO Sacrament of Penance (Magic, Effect)
Ignacio gains Lv 2 Protection & Lv 2 Shield.     Limit: Once per Battle

OOO  Lambs & Lions (Ki, Attack)
+3 Damage, if the target’s Resistance is less then Ignacio / +3 Attack, if the target’s Resistance is equal or higher then Ignacio.

OO Four Pillars (Ki, Effect, Reactive)
Ignacio may add his Armor value to his Defense value until the end of the current Activation.

OO Indomitable Faith (Ki, Attack)
+2 Attack / +2 Damage, Ignacio may only use this skill if he has Protection.

OOO Shining Crusader (Ki, Charge)
+4 Damage, Enemy units don’t block the Line of Charge to the chosen target.  Enemy units that are in the Line of Charge are consider to have intercepted the Charge.  Those Enemy units in the Line of Charge but not the target may Free Move out of the Line of Charge if they still have a Movement action.  Ignacio may only use this skill if he has Shield.

<Advantage Card>
War Steed
Type: Equipment  Category: Warrior
Actions: Automatic      Level: +15
This character’s Charges both Basic & Special causes Throw.  If an Enemy unit that Intercepted this character is Thrown, they are consider to be Overrun & this character may continue the Charge or Slam.

Name:  Ignacio de La Roca
Rank: Lord of the Knights of Argo
Place of birth: Ilion, Argos
Age: 28
Combat style: Imperial Fencing
Ethic Background: Vildianos
Raza: Human
Height: 1.89 m
Weight:  90kg
Pasttimes: Personal Combat
Likes: War Horses
Dislikes: Kushistan
   
Fluff: Lord of the Knights of Argo & cousin to King Guillermo Andreas II de La Rocha del Castillo y del Monte, Ignacio is a true champion of Christ.  Many have sought to test their skill against this crusader of the Lord & he has never backed down from a challenge.  But with his faith & skill he has yet to be defeated.

Note: Okay dokay this guy it likely very outside the concept of Church in A:T, as he is not part of the Saints Council, Inquisition, or Nathaniel, but a military man of Argo.  Yet I see Argo as Church’s military arm & while most of the soldiers are nowhere equal to those inside Church, there are far more of them & at least some of them should be as powerful.  Ignacio is a Paladin Lv 7 in the Gaia book, so I figured he would make a good tanky character.  I decided to toy with the idea of him having normal costing combat skills but then using Shield & Protection in a more direct way to give him sort of a blessed warrior boost.    Due to his relatively low Resistance I wanted something to help protect him but make it so he had to work to set it up, unless he used his one time boost, so Athleta Christi was born.  L&L is a variable attack and 4Pillars is for spam attackers.  Now with the aid of states, his other two offensive skills are cheap & powerful, with Shining Crusader being set up to blow threw speed bumps like Crystals and Ash Slaves.  A word on War Steed is that I was going to add a damage bonus but after looking at it I decided it was enough with throw and easier Overrun.

Like always if anyone wants to complain, question, or mock me I’m open to all comers.

-ape2020  

[Ape2020]

Decided to drop this guy out of the leadership roll and make a super support unit for the undead.  So here is a re-work of this monster in human form.

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TIME: 1330 HOURS
LOCATION: TERRASANTA, DWÄNHOLF
ALERT LEVEL: BLACK

ALERT, ALERT, ALERT

“Containment Cells have been compromised!  All senior staff member to…”

Sergei strolled down the hallway, checking his log for his daily tasks, when he stopped in front of Cell 111.  With a smile he pulled out his keys & unlocked the door.  Hiding in the corner was a small girl no older then ten.  

“Newt my darling, it seems like it time for me to depart.  I suppose you’re rather expendable now, though it’s a shame with such a cute little doll such as you.”  The screams of those being slaughtered echoed from the hallway.

“Well I should tell you lil’Newt there are monster out there, real monsters.”  Sergei spoke in a hushed tone as he handed her a small surgical knife.

Then Sergei got up & left.  The door was wide open as he turned the corner, a horde zombies appearing at the other end of the hallway…

Sergei Colbert
Black Sun
Dark
Prowler
50 levels
(Small Base - 30mm)

Quote “A man has only one way of being immortal on Gaia: he has to forget he is a mortal.”

Attack: 4
Damage: 1
Defense: 8
Armor: 2
Life Points: 13
Resistance: 10
Movement: 6/10
AP Recovery: 3/4
Guidance Points: 4

Field Monitors: Sergei Control Zone is 10 inches & doesn’t require Line of Sight.
Hard Coded ID: Out of control Undead units will never target Sergei with offensive actions.
Experimental Prototypes: Chose one type of non-unique Undead.  All versions of that type of Undead gain a permanent +1 Damage / +1 Armor.  If Undead units of the chosen type are added to the party due to Mobile Arcane Surgical Hospice they also gain this permanent bonus.

O Terminal Code (Special, Reactive, Effect)
Sergei may activate the Final Protocol of any Friendly Undead unit with that innate ability or any marker left by any Undead within his Control Zone immediately triggering the Attack action.  Remove the Undead unit or marker immediately when this attack is resolve.

O Re-directive Code (Subterfuge, Effect)
Sergei must spend at least one Guidance Point to use this skill. One Friendly Undead unit within Sergei's Control Zone recovers an Action Point for each Guidance Point used with this skill.  Undead units are still restricted by their Influence Level to the amount of AP they can recover with Guidance Points a turn.


++Second Card++
Sergei Colbert
Researcher of the Dead

O Grey Patchwork (Subterfuge, Effect)
One Friendly Undead unit within Sergei's Control Zone recovers 2 Life Points.  Sergei cannot use this skill if he is engaged by an enemy unit.

OO Saevio Viral Release (Subterfuge, Effect)
All units in Sergei Control Zone gain Lv 2. Berserk, effect 16.  All friendly units that are not Undead add +4 to their roll on the Resistance Check if they wish to resist this effect.  Sergei is completely immune this effect.  Limit: Once per Battle.

OO Mobile Arcane Surgical Hospice (Magic, Reactive, Effect)
This skill may be used when any unit that dies within Sergei’s Control Zone.  Choose an Undead type below & make the corresponding Difficulty Check.  If successful place that type of Undead with no modifications within Sergei’s Control Zone at the start of the next Recovery Phase.  Sergei cannot use this skill if he is engaged with an Enemy unit or if the unit that was killed was Undead.

Type-005        Difficulty: 3+
Type-009        Difficulty: 6+      

Name:  Sergei Colbert
Rank: Lead Black Sun Researcher
Place of birth: Unknown
Age: 29
Combat style: None
Raza: Human
Height: 1.88 m
Weight:  68kg
Pasttimes: Piano & Taxidermy
Likes: Science & Necrotech
Dislikes: Ignorant Superstitions

Fluff: Sergei Colbert is Black Sun’s brightest & most dedicated researcher they have.  And one of the evilest monster mankind has ever produced.  His obsession with the science of death has lead him to create some of the most powerful necromantic bio-weapons ever seen on the face of Gaia.  All stained by the blood & screams of the thousands of victims used to test his horrendous experimentation.

Note: I've kinda of see him as the Evangeline supporter to the Undead.    

As always any questions, comments, or suggestion is welcomed.  

-ape2020

[spacemonkey]

Alright, a new thread! On to the commentary:

First off, excellent character fluff as usual.

Locerot Greim
Love the character concept but I think both Art of Distraction and Deep Cover have problems. I see Art of Distraction as problematic as it has exceptions to its exception and as an ability it just seems kind of a tacked on solution to having to maintain Upkeep two abilities at once. Also I'm not sure exactly how arriving via Infiltration would play out with this ability and trying to enter with both abilities active.

While Deep Cover avoids the shenanigans found with Al-Djinn’s Ash Slave & Absolute Change skills, it also creates its own hiccups. The first is as a 3 AP ability that requires Upkeep is he is going to be stretched very thin on AP while also activating or Upkeeping Stealth, even if he receives help from Haste (via The Process). Another is that being allowed 25 levels worth of options essentially grants Locerot every skill option available (or useful) to him from those skill cards. Directly related this makes is the high likelihood Locerot will be running around with an Attack value of 7! Another issue is that changing Unit Type and/or Faction mid-game directly impacts his eligibility for a variety of Advantage cards. Connect in with this, if he is changing character types why change the ability types to Subterfuge? From my view point it unnecessarily complicates things with a net result of neutering him completely against Intangible units.

While I will definitely suggest reducing Locerot's base Attack value to 5, I'm not really sure on the best fix for the rest of the issues as Deep Cover's strength is it vast flexibility but "copy cat" characters are very tricky to balance (as has been seen with the Al-Djinn).  

On a positive note, I really like Decoy as an Advantage Card.

Dié Xing
For 35 Levels her stats look reasonable and Blade Ballet looks good. For Butterfly Dance you really should specify that it's the die roll that has to be 10+ because as it is written it could be interpreted as working on working on die roll of 5+ for any Attack.   For White Crane I would tweak the cost reduction to being reliant on the dodge actually being successful otherwise its a little too good for her Level cost. Honorable Presence is potentially problematic when you have any of the Three Dragons on both teams; would both sides receive an action point or whose characters take precedence?

As for Beautiful Ally, I am not really sold on shoe-horning another character into an established team, especially as Wanderers. I understand that the Three Dragons are kind of sub-par for a Team but the three for the price of one Wanderer slot grants quite a bit of flexibility and is already very advantageous to certain Organizations without adding a fourth into the mix. Realistically the Team card or characters needs to be revised as I not sure even Dié Xing's improvements could justify the 160 Levels it would take to field all four characters. I think a better option, that would still allow her to breathe new life into old characters, would be for her to be able to team up individually with any of the characters from Three Dragons. If you did so, I think you could combine Honorable Presence and Beautiful Ally into one ability.

Overall I really like the character, I just don't think she should the fourth member of the Three Dragons. As for the Equipment card Dual Weapons, I think it really cool but maybe too cheap at 10 Levels. Not being part of a Chain Attack and being able to be activated twice per turn are both pretty huge bonuses that I would drop to keep it at its current cost.

Ignacio
While I still have a few worries that he might work a little too well with a support heavy organization like Church, overall I see Ignacio as a solid beat-stick with a balanced set of abilities. Shining Crusader is the only one of his abilities that really gives me pause as it goes against characters blocking LOS and allows/forces characters to free move away from an enemy action. That said, unless Ignacio manages to Run Over an "intercepting" character it wouldn't actually end up different than any other charge. Going along with that thought is I think War Steed is under priced as an Equipment card; granting Throw alone would probably be worth 10 Levels. Otherwise I really like the card as is though I do think it's funny to imagine Veronica stealing someone's horse out from under them.  

Sergei Colbert
Looks pretty solid overall with some very unique and characterful support abilities. I do have a few questions and suggestions: Does Experimental Prototypes stay in effect after Sergei dies? (If so wouldn't this better served as a Plot card?) For Mobile Arcane Surgical Hospice the second to last line seems a little unclear on whether the +1 to the roll is meant as a bonus or a negative? As written, it appears as a bonus but I would think it should make the check harder (or not even be allowed for Undead units to prevent endless recycling). For Re-directive Code I would change the first line to: Sergei must spend at least one Guidance Point to use this skill. This would make it clearer that Sergei is allowed to use multiple Guidance Points with this skill, which I believe is your actual intent.

The only real big change I would suggest for Sergei would be to drop Advanced Protocols. Given his Hard Coded ID, an Out of Control unit doesn't particularly pose a threat to Sergei but more importantly there are already several established ways to counter act Uncontrollable including Guidance Points and the Type-005 and Type-009 Commander Models. I feel Advanced Protocols is unnecessary on Sergei and it would weaken a balancing element for the various Undead types.

More to come as I get time. Finished.  

[Ape2020]

spacemonkey: Welcome back!  Well I figured Locerot Greim needed some adjustment so her goes.  I've gone with the mantra of K.I.S.S.  

So I trimmed both Art of Distraction & Deep Cover.  Less is more I hope, taking out the deployment rules for Art of Distraction but adding it working for both Stealth and Deep Cover so having two Upkeep won't be so bad.

Taking out the convert stuff to Subterfuge but I had done that to show he is using smoke and mirrors to make it look like he had the same Magic or Ki skills as real agent but not really.  On another note I figure he already has the +10 level bonus to AP regen so I cut down his options to 15 levels worth.  Also place a restriction of it only workable after he deploys so it won't conflict with Infiltration.

As for the Attack Value I'm sorta going with Rayne style stats so high attack low damage.

Dié Xing
Clarified both Butterfly Dance and Honorable Presence so they know its the roll and only works with Friendly Dié Xing.  Did slightly improve them since I trimmed down Beautiful Ally.  Beautiful Ally removed all the include as an alley stuff which makes it tough for her to be included in most Org parties, but now she can help out with Double Dragon.  She now sorta of an insurance policy so you get a chance to use those special without it getting blown out of the water with just one of the Pao's being killed off.  That was my main problem with 3D team.  Oh and thanks for reminding my of The White Crane requirement as it was a last minute change form a cuminative defense bonus to the extra die action cost reduction.

Oh and Dual Weapons has been limited to one free attack per turn.  I almost changed when I first put it down but then thought I'll see if its a little to over powered or not.

Ignacio
Yeah I know his tailored made for Church with Evangeline giving him Shield anywhere on the battle field, Gemni giving either if he is close by, and the Church Agent popping him for both if you take that option.  I kind of see Church working that way in having the strongest synergy between units then any of the other Org.  But what would you think if I changed or dropped Sacrament of Penance.  That way he would need those support unit more then ever to power up his cheap attacks.  Oh and Shining Crusader was done in the way Hunter and Goethia break rules in not needing LOS to the target.  I tried to make sure it was clear what rule is being broken and that due to that exception how enemy units can also break the rules.  I tried to be as clear in this exception, so it can be a blockage buster against Ash Slaves and Crystals.

War Stead was bumped up to 15 levels but might just drop it back to 10 and trimming off the Over Run stuff.


-ape2020

[sAdam]

Hi it's my first homemade character so I know it will be unbalanced. I'm looking forward for your opinions.



Dietrich
Wanderer
Neutral
Warrior
60 lvl
Small base

Attack: 4
Damage: 3
Defense: 8
Armor: 0
Life Points: 32
Resistance: 11
Movement: 6/10
AP Recovery: 2/5

Out of this world – Dietrich can reduction the cost for any one Defensive Action by 1AP once each turn.

OOO Forced zeal (Ki, Charge)
+1 damage, if attack deals any damage Dietrich sacrifices 5 LP, if charge is unsuccessful he recovers 3LP.

OO True zeal (Ki, Charge)
Dietrich can roll only one dice during that charge, if attack causes Critical Hit Dietrich may use Painfull Memories without sacrificing LP

++Second Card++
Dietrich
ex-Jurgand

Painfull memories –  Dietrich can sacrifice 20 Life Points as a Free Action to gain the following for the rest of the game:
•   +3/+3 attack/damage
•   +2/+2 movement
•   +1 AP recovery
•       Critical Mastery


Fluff:
Dietrich (or at least how he calls himself nowadays) was one of Jurgand agents. After one of his more gruesome missions he lost faith in cause he was fighting for. That made him decided to leave Imperium, but that was only  possible after complete memory wipe. Without second thoughts he decided to discard a man he was. Trouble is even not being one of agents of Jurgand his will is just too strong for his own good, sometimes he is able to uncover some of his lost memories. During periods like that he recalls some memories and experiences of his times of Jurgand but at terrible cost of his own sanity.
  
Sry for bad grammar. English is not my first language.

[Ape2020]

Welcome aboard it is always great to have more people here.

Well lets see Dietrich is an interesting idea that at the moment I would say suffers from a few timing questions.  Stat-wise he is very underpowered except for LP.  That might be best if it came down to at least 30 LP, given that he is not a Damage Resistance creature allowing him to dodge reducing most damage to him & him having sorta healing if I miss special skill.  Both together will still make him a pain to take down compared to say a Gear or anything else in that LP range.

Might I suggest

Out of This World: Dietrich can reduction the cost for any one Defensive Action once each turn.  

This would allow Dietrich to chose when and how he uses this special.  So he can use it for a free dodge or allow him to whip out a surprise counter-attack at only OOAP.

Forced Zeal should be at least 3AP or a straight up Attack instead of a charge.  Given that even at 5 LP sacrifice its a charge and self buff that triggers on a failure.  So if your going to have a supplanting skill (specials that make the basic version obsolete) it really should only be equal in cost or have better restrictions like XII combo charge and attack with require an more expensive ranged attack to start.

True Zeal should come down to 2AP, and while I understand the concept of it being a key to free Painful Memories.  5AP skill should be able to stand on their own right as super powerful.  True Zeal isn't that powerful even if PM is up you looking at a 8 Att / 5 Dam over priced charge that is useless once PM is up.  Lowering the cost will make it an option even if PM is up.  If your worried about unbalanced I would change the bonus PM trigger to if he gets a Critical Hit instead of cause damage.  This is more risk balance then just damage that he could get just charging a DR creature or crystal.

Painful Memories I wondering how long it lasts and when can I make the LP sacrifice?  If its for the rest of the game I would change the wording to:


Painful Memories: Dietrich can sacrifice 20 Life Points as a Free Action to gain the following for the rest of the game:  
•   +3/+3 attack/damage
•   +2/+2 movement
•   +1 AP recovery
•   Critical Mastery

Now I know that last part might be fluff but if your going to potentially be losing that much LP he should be gaining all buff and no penalties.  Plus fluff wise isn't it enough that he taking half or more damage?

Like I said its a nice concept of a delayed beat stick but I'm thinking it need a few tweaks.

-ape2020

[Ape2020]

Okay I wasn't expecting to finish this one up but for some reason I really got on a roll so here is another "little" Samael girl.

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It was warm like a spa as young girl seemed to drift into haze.  She could feel her hot life force running out her body.  The beautiful Lady Artois was in front of her laughing as she sipped wine.  Leaning back in a dark crimson pool with rose petal gathering around her arms, knees, & neck as she smiled a cruel smile.

“I see you have a fresh companion tonight” a dark smooth voice called out from somewhere in the room.

“She is but a sheep, a pleasant surprise gift from Alba’s mistress.  You are my one & only companion, my Dark Cheshire” the Lady Artois raised her glass as streaks of crimson ran down her arm.

A handsome man with dark memorizing eyes entered the dying girls view.  He leaned over to speak softly into Lady Artois ear.  “But from destruction, beauty.  And from beauty, blood.”

Those were the last words the girl heard & the last vision was that of handsome man ripping out the throat of Lady Artois.

Soon the breaking dawn came & with it rising out of the crimson bath a new life.

"Ah, my sweet Lady, I see you've finally been reborn." Dark Cheshire bowed.

This form was so alien as blood continuously shifted into the air as if weightless.

The girl could only question "Who...NO WHAT AM I!"

Rachael Artois
Samael
Dark
Warrior
55 levels
(Medium Base - 40mm)

Quote “She will have blood, they say; blood will have blood.”

Attack: 5
Damage: 6
Defense: 8
Armor: 0
Life Points: 18
Resistance: 10
Movement: 8/12
AP Recovery: 3/4

Innate Ability: Open Movement

Metamorphosis: Rachael can be considered a Small or Medium base size at her controller’s discretion.  The base size must be declared before any rolls for effecting action is taken.
Blood Weapons: Rachael may activate before initiative any of the following options for the turn.  She must sacrifice 1 LP for each option chosen.
* Crimson Thorns: Rachael’s Offensive Actions cause -2 Armor to the target.
* Dark Vines: Rachael’s hand-to-hand attacks affect all enemy units within 2 inches.
* Deep Roots: Rachael’s hand-to-hand attacks gains +2 Damage.
* Razor Petals: Rachael’s gains Critical Hit on any Offensive Action roll of 9 or 10.

OO Blood Stones (Special, Effect)
Target one Enemy unit within Rachael’s Control Zone, they lose 3 Life Points, Effect 15.  If the target loses Life Points due to this skill, Rachael heals 3 Life Points.

OO Blood Ammunition (Magic, Ranged Attack)
(Distance 16 inches) Rachael may take up to 3 consecutive Ranged Attacks on the same target.  She must sacrifice 2 Life Point for each Ranged Attack she makes with this skill.

OO Sanguinius (Magic, Attack)
Rachael must sacrifice 3 Life Points for each Enemy unit that is in range to use this skill. If this attack gets a Critical Hit any targets 50 levels or lower must make a Resistance Check against Effect 15 or are taken over by Rachael’s controlling player.  As a free action Rachael may attempt to remove a controlled character as a casualty but that character immediately gets another Resistance Check, Effect 15.  If passed the character is no longer under control. A controlled character may attempt to break free at the start of the each Recovery Phase, Effect 15. If any characters remain under control in the Upkeep phase, Rachael may choose to sacrifice 3 LP to maintain this ability into a new turn.

<<Second Card>>
Rachael Artois
Master of Le Rose Du Sang

OO Le Pétale (Ki, Effect)
Each time Rachael takes damage she gains Lv 2 Shield.  Upkeep: O

OOO Mille Petales De Rose (Ki, Effect)
Remove any amount of Shield Tokens on Rachael.  Each Shield Token removed produces a separate Attack 6 / Damage 6 attack on all Enemy units within 4 inches of Rachael.  Le Pétale is required to be active for this skill to be used.  The actually attacks cannot be countered or effected by any ability that requires a Resistance Check. None of Rachael's Innate Abilities, Powers, Equipment, or States on her affect these attacks.

Name: Rachael Artois “Scarlet Marquise”
Rank: Marquise
Place of birth: Unknown (Reborn Dupios, Gabriel)
Age: 19 (True Age 26)
Combat style: Le Rose Du Sang
Ethic Background: Blood Rose
Raza: Blood Elemental
Height: 1.75 – 3.10m
Weight:  100kg
Pasttimes: Setting up extravagant private parties.
Likes: Beauty, especially her own & powerful men.
Dislikes: Beautiful Noble Women.

Fluff: Formally the fiancé of the future Arch-Chancellor of Gabriel, Joshua Fardely.  The lady now known as Rachael Artois met a tragic end within the Artois mansion.  Yet on that night she was reborn in a pool of blood.  Now claiming the name of Rachael Artios & title “Scarlet Marquise”.  She has risen with the help of Samael to be force both exquisite & deadly, as she seeks to adulation & vengeance.

Notes: Here is another unit I pulled from both Those That Walk Among Us and Dominus Exxet.  Originally she was going to have a huge weaken in that she was all sacrifice and no way to recover, aka Kingley Syndrome.  But looking at Blood Stone being such a overpriced advantage that would work wonders here and looking like she was going to use two cards anyways I basically put in a usable version on her.  Pretty much the rest of the stuff on the first card is how I converted straight for the entry of Blood Rose or Red Queen.  Depending on how much she wants to sacrifice she can become a real dangerous beat stick.  Now Sanguinius ability detailed in TTWAU I envision as Samael’s version of possession ability Church has with Azur and Empire having lesser versions.  Its still hard to do and very costly but it can be game changing if pulled off en masse.  Now the second card is almost straight from the Ki book and I almost add a few more techniques from that tree but decided there was already enough going on.  One final note on the fluff, I originally had Kerberos ripping out Lady Artios throat since it is rumored the virus that makes Blood Roses is caused by Vampires or Vetala.  But at the last minute I wanted a better connect to Samael without writing more story.

Like always I’ll be around to take any comments, questions, or suggestions.  As well as leave any when others feel like joining the fun.

-ape2020

[sAdam]

Thanks for the feedback Ape. I applied some for your suggestion. I decided that he will sacrifice more that half of the total LP. It will be more fair that way. Somebody may use his Painful Memories at the beginning of the combat and use time when enemy approaches to heal Dietrich.

A propos your most recent creation. I think characters with higher lvl should ignore Body of Blood rule as well. Just a suggestion.